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Shelvs Fleurima
just a digital painter on a quest
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Pau Luna
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Looking for feedback and critics. Thank you
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Giuliano Lo Bartolo
Hi, first of all: Its a very nice sketch! But there are some flaws in anatomy and perspective (dont worry its not something utterly serious). Your perspective with the neck and the muscles that attach to the clavicle doesnt match the rotation of the torso. The clavicles point to the viewer, while the torso points to the right side. Its not much, but the right arm is a bit too large compared to the other arm. And to the horns in the hair: They dont attach to the head on the same point if thats what you were after, also they dont quite have the same hight. Hope I wasnt too nitpicky and hope I could help :) Sincerely, Giuliano
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shackman
I'm a noob too but I'll try anyway ;-) It would help if you say what exactly you are looking to improve, and what you were aiming for with the drawing. If you were going for an elegant female, then the super bulging shoulders are doing the opposite. They would also be distracting on a male, it's pretty much impossible to have shoulders this big and upper arms this thin/undefined. Also I'd suggest to use less lines, be more confident (no matter the outcome) and try to give every line a purpose. The loosenes can come later
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Shelvs Fleurima
I would love to criticize you, but sadly I am a noob , and bit hesitant at criticizing since I still got my training wheels. I am writing you to et you know that your sketch looks great, and to keep pushing.
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Pau Luna
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Hi, I´ve been drawing for a long time as a side job. Looking for get better and become a professional artist now. This but a sketch, I´ll upload more things for your valuable comments
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Jens Römer
i would do the jaw bit more round cause its a woman and the cheekbones a lil higher
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winterpencil
I like how expressive the face is, I would watch out for the line quality which seems to be a little bit scratchy, proko has a video on how to correctly hold a pencil, it's worth a watch! Good luck on your art!
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Shelvs Fleurima
Looking good, are you currently taking the portrait class?
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Shelvs Fleurima
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Commissioned by K S. please critic so I can get better and notice my common mistakes. thank u in advance .
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Steve Lenze
Hey Shelvs, There are 2 issues I see in your work. The first is your drawing. You tend to have a problem placing the features on the face, and the proportions as they relate to each other, particularly the length of the nose and the distance to the mouth. The second issue is your use of shadows. All your shadows are too dark regardless of the local value. The shadow on a dark object will not be the same as the shadow on a light object. You are also putting areas of light in the shadows. You must keep the shadows and the light side separate. Also, your light side looks like its all highlights, there needs to be more value changes between the darks and the lights. I hope this is helpful :)
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Shelvs Fleurima
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finished took me a while.
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John Harper
Hey Shelvs, I'm wondering about proportions. Sometimes we exaggerate to make the subject more heroic. I'm guessing that's what you did here. Sometimes, exaggeration, in gesture and in a finished work like this one goes a bit too far. In this case, her head seems too small, and the body seems to grow as you progress down the frame. Again, that may have been intended. Your thoughts?
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Shelvs Fleurima
I painted over the painting to fix the face and I ended up with muddy colors especially on cheeks. I should plan my painting before starting it
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Shelvs Fleurima
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I am getting better , I wanted to for that rough look
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Steve Lenze
Hey Shelvs, It's good that you notice that your getting better, it can be really good motivation. I think that moving forward, you should really focus on the structure of your drawings. Your issue isn't design, you seem to have a lot of ideas, but some of your drawings are in need of improvement in proportion, anatomy and structure. These things will give your drawings more 3D quality. I did a draw over of your first character to show you what I mean. I hope this is helpful :)
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Fishing with the boys
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i know thy are too saturated
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Light study from memory
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Shelvs Fleurima
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Grey scale studying did. I am sticking to it for a while and then move to color once I payed for the class.
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Yiming Wu
Woo colourful! I could imagine the first one being printed on t-shirts:)
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Shelvs Fleurima
Thank you, the first one is something I did for my bro’s channel. I improvised the background
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Elias Lemus
Great Great work! As far as critique, I'd think about brushwork and just trying to make the texture of different materials portray what they are, if that makes sense. Doing awesome!
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Shelvs Fleurima
Thank you, I am a noob to textures. Got a few new oil brushes. But never got any tuto on how to properly apply them. Most of the time I am so concerned at conveying shapes, and light rather than the texture. 😞
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darko
“quick study“of “john singer sargent “
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Shelvs Fleurima
Your line works are so good, so confident.
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Bloodborne cover arts
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Gabriel Kahn
Hello there! I love the mood of these images. The third picture is my favorite I really like the depth :) I can see a very common mistake you are making which is that you are shading with black and white. It's very rare that you will see similar lights and shadows in nature because there are so many reflected lights, and even the light sources (sun, sky, lamp...) carry some colors in them. Here, I can show you an example. Keep up the good work!
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Shelvs Fleurima
I see where you are coming from , I try to mitigate this issue, but for the 3rd pic I just did it the easy way. i this picture you pointed out I painted the blacks afterwards because it’s night and I wanted to emphasize the light source. Thank you for pointing it out. I am in constant struggle to add some black to my painting, because of that I almost always end up witch high contrast works.
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oliver lindenskov
Hey Shelvs These are looking promising I think you could gain a lot from studying portraiture or at least the forms and planes of the face/head. Firstly it would help the believability of your heads. Secondly, I think studying portraiture helps a lot with a general understanding of creating form or even modelling form if you want to take your work to that much of a finish.
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Shelvs Fleurima
Did this after complication. I am currently practicing and horning my skills
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Shelvs Fleurima
I took the class before the 2.0 update. And some of those works were created before I finished it
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A new batch of old and new works
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Josh Sunga
Hey Shelvs! Good work! I like your third one because it reminds me of Halo and Destiny. I'm glad you're putting your characters in full scenes. It's a great practice. I do think whether it's before or after you could try to explore different ways the character might look. (I do understand sometimes you just have to get a full image down!) I took your character and just tried to have fun making variations. I try to contrast each one against another so that I get to come up with something different each time. Even if a character deviates you could just keep exploring! For me, it's really just an exercise to practice better shape design- and if I get a character I like that's a plus.
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Shelvs Fleurima
Got limited data, I can’t afford to repost those pics, sorry. Hope everything is good on your side. I have been dealing with the flood and moving.
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Here is another quick one, https://www.proko.com/s/Hk3o
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