My latest b&w portrait, opinion and critiques are welcome!
4yr
Marco Fornaciari
Hello guys! This is one of my portrait paintings, this time i wanted a realistic piece while maintaining a "charcoal/paninterly" vibe.
Please share your thoughts and your critiques!
Thanks ♥
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4yr
Hey Marco! Great job on this. I couldn't do better myself!
Something I might say is to take a look at the eye structure and mouth. For the eyes, it feels like they're not quite aligned, and her right eye specifically feels strange to me. Maybe flip the canvas, it might give a better idea of what I'm thinking.
For the mouth, it feels like it's slightly off the center line.
But those are nitpicking! This is really a wonderful study, super impressive
Keep up the good work!
Thank you so much Kristian! Yes, i totally understand your point, i had some problems with the right placements and the strong cast shadow on the mouth. I'll probably do it differently now.
I'll try to share more work and more progress in the future! ♥
Very nice work! The thing that stands out to me is feeling like the right side of her face, image right, her left, looks darker than I think it should be with that light. I feel like that gradation should be more subtle for those halftones, both on the cheek and on the jaw, and the temple and next to the ear. This feels especially apparent when compared to her shoulder, and how light that is, although I feel like you might be trying to insert a fade down there wanting to keep more focus on the face. But even with the head alone I feel like it is a bit darker than what I would expect. The light seems to be coming mostly from above and a tiny bit in front, and a bit to the right of the image as well. She is also leaning her head to the image left, which makes me feel that more light should be hitting those halftones. These are just my thoughts though, I could be wrong.
You are doing something interesting with the texture, around the eyes and on the chin. You have some curvy partial rings that look like they were made with an eraser. I like the concept there, but I also feel that they are a bit detracting as is. I think that is because they feel like they are only in a couple places rather that something that is throughout the piece. So my eyes see it more as “what’s that” rather than just understanding it as an integral part of the expression of the piece. I don’t know how to improve that, but maybe if you interrogated more of that it into the piece it would be more clear. Like you were seeing the portrait through a kind of filter. Or maybe if you just used it at certain parts of the drawing, for instance, on more rounded surfaces, or maybe where halftones met shadow or something. Or you could leave it as is but make it a more subtle value change so it doesn’t draw attention so much. Or if you like how it is that is fine too. These are just some of the thoughts I had when looking at it.
Again, really nice work. You captured her expression nicely. I like how you have blurred out some of the hair the way you did, it is a neat look. It also helps you focus on her face, while also serving to help place her into the background. It’s a neat idea, something I would never think to try at this state in my learning.
You are right! I should probably darker the shoulder area or crank up the values on the face a little bit to give more of the "egg effect". The light should be 1 single source on top right of the image, judging from the cast shadows.
Thanks for the feedback, really appreciated!
Wow cool! I love how you keep the facial features tight and the hair loose. Also the structure is well defined. Nicely done!
What kind of brush did you use? The variety of texture here is very nice!
Thanks! Glad you like it!
I'm not really sure about all the brushes, it's a collection i've made over time. For sure there are some Greg Rutkowski brushes (you can find those in a lot of artists pack becasue they are incredible)