Thank you so much for the feedback, Jeremy! You helped me realize my weak point, and wow, what you did incredibly improved my work. I'll keep working hard to get better!

I get always so giddy seeing something of my work critiqued. :D I will watch your critique over and over again to learn from it. Your versions made the atmosphere so much more dense and palpable. Thank you so much for the tips. And the way you‘d pronounce my name is „Kassyan“. But english speaking people just say Kass 😀. Thanks, Jeremy!

Thanks @Jeremy Vickery for the critique, I learned a lot from the feedback!