Jon Tharaldsen
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I really like your light and shadow example. You did a good job of identifying the proper locations for a heavy line without overdoing it.
I also like the chunky, angular quality of your strokes in the hierarchy of importance image.
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For the Hierarchy of Importance method, I attempted to trace over the faint red-lined version. My goal was to show the entire mass as most important, with less importance given to the inner details.
For the Shadows and Light method, I traced over the original photo. I had a difficult time distinguishing where I should put a heavy vs light line and I ended up adding too much detail and overworking it.
My goal is to try this again with a variety of simpler shapes, so I can become familiar with the concepts.
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I also attempted some additional images that I thought would be fun. The first three were done with colored pencil, which I don't think provides enough contrast for this exercise (at least for me). The flower was done with pen and I like the result.
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Another attempt, over photos
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I think this was a great way to continue exploring. I like that you diagrammed the light direction and I think you did a good job on all of them.
You inspired me to try this exercise on a few images myself. Thanks!
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I completed the hand, penguin, and robot girl but I decided to continue exploring frogs. I liked the shapes and wanted to practice with them.
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Not sure I’ve managed to simplify enough. The boots certainly still have a lot going on.
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Hi Henner, I think you did a fine job simplifying. Overall, your proportions look good and you created nice, clean drawings. I particularly like your boots. I actually think there might be some lines missing in the snail, as the body looks a little flat. Your shapes are neat and graphic. As an idea, I'd like to see you test a looser, more expressive line. Great work.
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I attempted all of the sketches, plus there are a few random characters in there too. I've noticed that I'm having a difficult time with proportions. I need to continue to pay attention and refine if shapes get wonky. Any feedback is appreciated.
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I thought that drawing these silly plush toys would be easy. I wanted to focus on clear lines. My cruvy lines are uneven. I clearly see where I need to improve. Ellipses are the angst of my life. There is only one place which I liked in the end. Day 8.
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Day eleven. After my girlfriend and I finished our life drawing class, I ventured off to my local park again.
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I think you captured the essence of the bird on the left very nicely. Great subject choice.
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This is a very nice variety of studies and great pen work. I particularly enjoy the round tree on the 2nd page.
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From left to right these are my attempts.
The very first one is before I saw the demo/critique. The second and third are after demo and critique.
The second one is more of a thumbnail where I tried to be looser.
My proportions are all over the place I think, I like the value shapes the most in the third one, although the value range could be wider. I think I like the overall value shape unity of the 3rd one the most, i tried to focus on the bigger picture as per the "egg" stuff Proko mentioned.
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Hi Justin,
Way to go. I like that you made multiple attempts. The side-by-side is very useful too.
For the 3rd iteration, I like that you created a dark shadow on the neck and shirt. It reads very cleanly. However, when looking at the photograph, the neck reads very similar to the right side of the face. I think darkening that area could help.
On the left side, I think the 2nd and 3rd values are too close together. If you lightened the 2nd value, that side of the face would really pop (Similar to your 1st attempt).
Keep up the great work.
Hi all,
A few things I noticed that need work:
- I made the face too wide
- I made a few of the planes on the left hand side too dark. I realized this after and wasn't sure how to make them lighter.
- The lower portion of the shirt doesn't read very well.
Any other tips?
Any suggestions on photography? I'm using an indirect window for light but the graininess of the paper really shows.
Thanks!
I tried this lesson again with a ceramic dog.
Thinking about the plane changes and how they connect really helped me. Also, receiving feedback about lightening edges lines was very beneficial.
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Didn't leave enough room for the full cast shadow. Excited to get started. Would love feedback if anyone is still looking at these older projects!
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I agree with Colin. You did a nice job of simplifying the pear. I like that you added a slightly darker value on the right side in spots. Keep working on creating a crisp edge.
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I had a lot of fun with this exercise. I tried Pear 03 before I watched the demonstration video. Pear 01 was after. My first attempt definitely involved too many facets and gradations. I also attempted a few images from books I had lying around but I don't have the reference photos. A valuable lesson I learned was that even "boring" subjects can be turned into interesting and dynamic shapes. Thanks!
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