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felipev99
Hey guys, I just finished this portrait and need some feedback, how can I improve this drawing? and btw, I'm not interested in likeness
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Avel Ciobanu
It looks very nice, very clean and even there are some thing that are a little off, it feels like you took a good direction. I think that the mein thing that could impruve your drawing from this point is better undertanding of forms. It would relly help you understand what you draw if you understand of what 3d shapes the object you draw is buildt. For this i think would be very helpful to study schems of Loomis head, Bridgman head and asaro head. First two will help youbetter construct shapes, the third one will help you undrrstand how better to apply light and shadow to it. Hope it was helpful, keep drawing!
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Andrei
First of all, I want to mention your great work with shapes and shadows. It feels very confident. Good job. If we talking about problems of your work, the first thing that I see is volume. You can easily spot it on the mouth area. I tried to analyze separate parts of your drawing. I can say that mouth and chin feels like 30 degrees angle from the viewer, but the eyes and nose turned about 45 degrees. What I suggest is to analyze volumes on the reference and apply for your amazing shape work on these volumes.
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felipev99
Yess, I was thinking too flatly of the head as a whole and that resulted in the features being at different angles, thanks Andrei
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Jon Fredrick
for me, it comes down to the eyes being off... the model's eyes are open where you have very heavy lids that make her look like they are half-closed. The rendering is beautiful but the emotional connection is very different. Best of luck!
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Peter Anton
Here's what I notice: 1) the bridge of the nose is vertical in yours, when it should be angled 2) your edges are too hard on the cheek, forehead, and chin. Needs a smoother transition from shadow to light 3) the far side of the face is drawn as if it's straight on, which gives your drawing a "stretched out" look. Overall I'd think more about wrapping the features around the 3d forms of the head
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felipev99
Thanks for the feedback! spot on
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Luigi Manese
Hi @felipev99, I think the biggest thing to address would be the construction of the head. I think you may have laid in the centerline of the head going straight down, and then lined the features up accordingly. Keep in mind that in a slight 3/4 view like this, the centerline of the head is actually going to be curving forward slightly, and so you have to keep that in mind when aligning the features to that centerline. Doing this should make your drawing feel more solid overall. Great work!
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felipev99
Daamn, you have an eye for this. You're absolutely right, I drew a straight vertical line in the construction, thank you!
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