Interrogation (cartoon illustration): looking for feedback
2yr
Liandro
Hey, guys! 😄 I’m working on this piece now and would love some honest feedbacks. Idea, composition, style, gesture, shapes, forms, light, colors… anything feedback-worthy that pops up to you is valid! Hope to get some help. Thanks in advance! 🙌🏻
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Liandro
@Jo Sheridan @Matthew Manghi @Mary Verzosa @Tiger Gayle-Walker @Jason Arizona Guys, thank you so much for your replies and feedbacks! This is all really helpful - it definitely allowed me not only to confirm what's working well, but mainly to get a glimpse of things I had no clue needed to be worked on. I feel like I should go back to a design stage and think through stuff I guess I overlooked too quickly hehe. All the points each of you made do make sense and I'm truly grateful for you taking the time to help me! Best wishes to you all! \o/
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Jason Arizona
I really like this cartoon. The one piece of critique I could provide is that the way the hand is placed in relation to how the table is bent makes it look less like he's applying his body weight to the table, and more like the table is built like that.
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Tiger Gayle-Walker
Hey @Liandro! Great expression! from the dog's fear (and size), composition & guy's angry rage (and size)! This is more of a suggestion, as it seems your going with a portrayal of power with the man's overbearing rage bending the table and chair, would you say, as the man's bending forward, the chair legs could bend all in unison to complement the C curve as you have with the dog's chair, shifting the weight from directly down from the pelvis to a teetering 'seesaw' like distribution of his body weight? PS. Massive thanks for your previous critiques!!
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Liandro
You're welcome, @Tiger Gayle-Walker, and many thanks for your helpful feedback in my work here! I'm just not sure I completely understood the idea of "shifting the weight from directly down from the pelvis to a teetering 'seesaw' like distribution of his body weight" - would you mind attempting to clarify it a bit more for me? Thanks again!
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Rose M.
Hey @Liandro ! This piece is fantastic... the composition, gesture and lighting all work really well! Your use of different line-thickness also helps lead the eye to the important figures in the piece. Overall, I just love how expressive it is. Awesome work! I think however, that the piece could be improved if the shoe looked more obviously shoe (hope that makes sense) and if the bare-foot of the character was more emphasized so that it's one of the first things you look at within the picture. I think that would help the storytelling aspect of the image read more clearly. Hope that helps! That said, I'm still quite inexperienced when it comes to draftsmanship, so please take my word with a grain of salt.
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Matthew Manghi
I really love the expression in the characters, especially the dog's face, which is just perfect. you really capture a ton of emotion in this scene! I do think the shoe/barefood piece just doesn't read well enough though. In fact, I didn't even realize that was what was going on until I read the comments and looked at it again. I think the chewed shoe needs to have a more "shoeish" look. The missing shoe on the man is cool but I think making it really clear that the man is holding a chewed up shoe would really help the impact of the storytelling. The only other thing I would consider is expanding the value range of the color a bit. Really fun drawing!
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Jo Sheridan
Hey @Liandro this is cool - me giving you feedback for a change... I had to look at this for ages to work out what was going on - for me, the eye is drawn to the thing that the man is holding over the dog (who is clearly terrified) and it was only when I finally spotted that the man was only wearing one shoe that I realised what it was that he was holding... could you put his shoeless foot on his right leg and stick it out a bit so we can see it more quickly - also where did his sock go? you could have a saggy sock hanging off his shoeless foot... the other tack would be to make his shoe less mangled up so it is easier to recognise - I know you have got saliva dripping off it, but I thought it was an oyster or something like that at first... I guess the other thing would be to inject a new colour into this by making his boots red/orange for example so we make the connection between the two... Hope all is going well with the little one by the way :) Jo.
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Liandro
@Jo Sheridan Thank you, Jo! XD Little Gabriel is turning out to be the cutest thing in the world (in my unbiased opinion, haha) - he's now 3 and a half months and interacting so much with us, smiling a lot and making funny noises. In fact he's right here with me now taking a nap in the sling (and oops, almost woke up as I was typing...) Thanks again for you super helpful feedback too!
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2yr
Fantastic execution and funny. The officer’s badge would read better with some highlights. Love the man’s teeth flying out of his mouth which is stylized and exaggerated, could make it a bit more anatomical. Local color of dog is muted for being one of the central characters. Hope this helps.
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Liandro
It helps very much, thank you! :)
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Liandro
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All points of view are welcome, not just technical!
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@eenemodia
how are you so good at drawing
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