Hey @Liandro ! This piece is fantastic... the composition, gesture and lighting all work really well! Your use of different line-thickness also helps lead the eye to the important figures in the piece. Overall, I just love how expressive it is. Awesome work! I think however, that the piece could be improved if the shoe looked more obviously shoe (hope that makes sense) and if the bare-foot of the character was more emphasized so that it's one of the first things you look at within the picture. I think that would help the storytelling aspect of the image read more clearly. Hope that helps! That said, I'm still quite inexperienced when it comes to draftsmanship, so please take my word with a grain of salt.
Hi,here are my comic page layouts,for the first image i used the second page from David's scripts.Here i would choose the second sketch.For the second image i used David's third example script,here i choose the first sketch.For the third image i used my own script,here my choise is the first,or the fourth sketches. Here is my script: "Anh'blei(not final title)" - Karafa Roland PAGE 1: Six Panels Panel One: We open with an establishing shot of a big kingdom,its surrounded by huge unreachable mountains with only one entrance.The whole kingdom is having a cascading build,the highest place is the main square that is right before the castle.On the middle of the square there is a huge fountain with a statue,the whole square is looking stunning. Maludrin: Kea'l Siren,the Shield of Erosgul. Panel Two: We have a closer look at the Square and the castle with more focus on the square,we can see that there are many people on the square,it is some kind of a festival.This is a human kingdom,but we can see many kind of races on the streets enjoing the event. Maludrin: The people of Kea'l Siren are enyoing the DARKSTAR FESTIVE... Panel Three: The folks are enjoying the festival,some elf girl are dancing in the fountains water,there are also some children playing in the water. There are a couple standing in front of a vendors stand. Maludrin: And they have no idea... Panel Four: Here we have a closer look at the elf girl in the fountain,she is very attractive looking with a smile on her face as she dancing. Eronil: Let them celebrate, MALUDRIN. They deserve it. Panel Five: Now our focus is on the castle,its a huge building built on a big mountain's cliff wall. Its giant structure rises above us.From the square, big stairs leads to the castle entrance. Two guards protecting the entrance. Maludrin: As they deserve to KNOW that soon Kea'l Siren will PERISH! Panel Six: We move closer to the castle's entrance with the guards. Seredin: Not just Kea'l Siren,but all EROSGUL.
Here are my five passes at laying out the page. I chose the second page that David provided. My initial thought was to end the page dramatically with the scientist leaving the scene, so with my first attempt I laid things out to lead to that moment. For attempt 2, i reread the script and realized i missed that the last panel is supposed to be through the lens of the camera. I also changed the angle and sizing of panel five to make it more dramatic. On attempt 3 I did some editing of the script. We are given a description of the building from the outside, then immediately given a new description of the inside where the scene actually takes place. I decided to cut the outdoor panel to make the page more concise. also changed the angle of the clawed hand again. This new angle allowed me to showcase some violence and action. I think it really energizes the the page. After looking at the page as a whole though, I realized the focus goes straight down the page On Attempt 4, I went all in on the claw. I feel that choosing to focus on it really gave the page a central moment to work around. I also tried to combine panels 1 and 2 from the script. The idea is to establish the lab in the foreground, and have the proko sign in the background outside a window. For the last attempt, I decided to do what I was told and bring back the panel of the building. I personally like either 4 or 5 the most. The one I'd choose to work would depend on the rest of the story. If it's important, or difficult to figure out where the scene takes place, I would pick 5. If not, I would go with 4. What do you think of my thought process? Are there details that I'm missing or should focus on more? Where do you disagree with me?
Greetings Irshad! How do you schedule your time when drawing for 'Orc and Gnome's Mild Adventures'?
Hello everyone! This is more of a quality of life suggestion, but I was wondering if this site could have a library for all the 3D models you bought access to. I use them as reference for my drawings often (both for class and outside of it), so it would be pretty neat to have them all in one place instead of having to scroll through your lessons to find each one. You could even add them in 'Tools' perhaps? What are your thoughts?
Hello everyone! This is my first post here, so I hope I'm doing this correctly... if not, please let me know. I've finished Figure and I'm currently learning joints in Anatomy. That said, I wanted to revisit mannequinization since the method has been such a big help when drawing from reference or imagination! I've attached four samples of my work from the exercises, as well as a page where I use mannequins to draw poses from imagination (the last page). During the exercises, I would try to draw the pose myself (Me 1st), then draw while watching Stan (Proko), then try the pose again myself from memory (Me 2nd). Feel free to point out any of my bad habits or consistent errors! Feedback is welcomed and appreciated! And @Liandro ... I took a cursory look around the site and found your feedback to be very helpful and insightful. If you have time, I would like your opinion too if that's okay!