How is the Composition?
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Atharva Lotake
Hello guys this is my latest piece What do you guys think about it? Does the foreground building look too crowded with detail also what do you guys think is the focal point and is the composition good or could it be better? Constructive Criticism appreciated.
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Jennifer Wang
@Atharva Lotake This is so cool!! I love how you positioned the camera angle so that it feels as if your character is powerfully watching over the city, and the contrast between the towering buildings and rooftops and the tiny cars is really effective. I think that you can consider varying your line thickness as you go back farther into space to really push the sense of depth in your drawing, especially because you are only working with line and no tone thus far. You've already done it really effectively in some areas, but all the foreground buildings and their details should definitely have thicker line work than those in the mid-ground. As for the composition and focal point, it depends on what you're trying to accomplish! If you want your character to be the focal point, I recommend making them bigger. Consider how your character is feeling, and how that might affect the way their body is positioned -- are they just floating in one place, are they flying to somewhere further down in the composition, are they in peril or rescuing someone in peril? Since your buildings are very vertical and so is the gesture of your character, my eye immediately goes to the cape that your character is wearing, since it's curving and feels more organic than the rest of the scene, and because it's so different from the way all the other lines and shapes feel, it stands out the most by contrast. Hope that helps a little. Keep up the great work!! :)
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Atharva Lotake
I have listened to your podcast with Stan and Marshall, it is really inspiring to see your thoughts on that topic, keep up the great work!
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the feedback! I really appreciate it.
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Dominik Zeillinger
Hi @Atharva Lotake I like the image and hope it is part of a story. It seems to me, that the hero is looking for something in the streets below or is simply guarding the down. It is mysterious, that there are just two vehicles at the street. What is the reason that there is no traffic jam? Maybe the hero is watching the last people leaving the town, before the last fight against some dark villain? I like the architecture of the building and how they form a kind of maze or puzzle showing the hopeless thoughts of the hero about how to defeat the villain. A little flaw is the air conditioning system on the building in the foreground. I think the system should be much larger because in your image it is approximately the same size as at the other buildings farther away. Considering perspective this is not consistent. I tried a quick paint over to show you my point.
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the feedback! I really appreciate it.
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Izak van Langevelde
I think that, apart from the single character, the composition is too uniform, and not very interesting. Your character is just hanging there, looking, but there is nothing to see?
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the feedback! I really appreciate it.
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