first long drawing and looking for critique!
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Patrick Velena
Just finished Stan's gesture drawing classes & here's the outcome of the long drawing assignment i did. Would love to hear some critique on it!
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Demetrio Cran
nice! great gesture and good-looking anatomical details! regarding shading, I believe that the rim light (the secondary light from the left) looks too much linear, so it breaks the illusion a little bit. :-) Also, you should add a cast shadow, some dar tones in the floor she is standing. It does not need to be accurate. Otherwise, it looks unnatural, though she could be standing on a piece of glass!
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Arthur Cardoso
Nice work Patrick! That gesture is incredible. I would be more careful on your shadow values, on the legs it's clear that you lost some strenght in the shadows. Your planes are good but the shadows are kinda confusing since there is no clear transition/separation like core shadows. Keep up the great work my dude! You will get places this way.
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James Doane
Nice work!
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Patrick Velena
Thank you!
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@drainconsul
You have done well! I would disagree with the previous posters that your value range should be punchier, you can keep it subtle if you like. Much more important is that the reflected lights on the shadow side are not brighter than the lights! I think in some places this is the case in this one and it gives those reflected light on the back an "outline-y" feel to them. There are some drawing errors I think on the shoulder (looks a bit thin and noodely but I am not sure without seeing the reference) and the toes.
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Patrick Velena
Thank you! Im still new to drawing so im still only used to using the 2-value and 5-value range technique so I end up having a hard time pushing my darks and lights because i feel like im super meticulous all the time instead of going with artistic choices. But thank you for pointing out the other parts of the body, im still struggling to making sure the form is there. I'd say i suck alot doing the landmarks assignment and up till now so i ended up making up for the torso and ended up neglecting the rest of the body.
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Smithies
Well done on your first long drawing! It's a great first attempt. I think you've really kept the gesture in so well done because it's easy to lose that over time. I agree with Oliver regarding the tones though, I think you could really improve this image with bolder lights and darks.
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Patrick Velena
Thank you! And yes i do agree after walking away from these for a few days. Ive always struggled in pushing my lights and darks personally.
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oliver lindenskov
This is looking really good, I think! I feel like you could add some more volume to the drawing by pushing the darks in the core shadow and brightening the light area a bit (make sure you seperate the two areas from each other). Dorian Iten has a couple free videos on lighting, that I find are super helpful (search for Dorian iten egg on YT).
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Patrick Velena
Thank you very much and i appreciate the critique! I've been watching some of dorian's videos lately but only after ive done this piece so I wish i found out about him earlier. I am still struggling in terms of technicality of what/where is the core shadow and what is local value/color since im just self taught so I tend to feel it out by doing the 5-value process. Ive watch alot of shading or shadow tutorials but they always just talk about the sphere or the egg but when it comes to a much more complicated form like a torso where there's so much busy detail or lighting going on i end up getting lost, do you have any advice about it? So far im just trying my best to make sure to seperate everything from the darks from the lights in the earlier stage just to make sure i dont lose form.
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