Elias Lemus
Elias Lemus
Omaha, NE
Yiming Wu
It looks alright to me in the first sight... the main "weird" thing might be the shoulder in front (on the left side of the image). Looks like you are drawing "inside" the canvas, so that shoulder feels cramped. It should probably be _a lot_ wider to the left and the chest should be reasonably thicker as well. Otherwise it looks good enough. If we are talking about painting, then the value separation might be an issue as you have basically a back-lit situation, so the tree shapes could get mixed up with the characters. So you might want to develop the value distribution before going in.
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Elias Lemus
You're totally right about the shoulder.. thank you! And yes, ill be working out the values before I start. Just wanted to get some feedback on the initial idea. Thank you!
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Alec Brubaker
I agree with the others that the falling pose is a bit stiff. N.C. Wyeth was big on 'acting out' and character he was illustrating to really get a feel for what they would look like doing their thing, and It's a great idea to try it. Really imagine yourself as this guy jumping at this enemy. What would your body be doing? How would the weight be shifting as you fall through the air? Would your weapon be in one hand, or both? And do the same for the orc guy as well! Does he hear a rustling in the trees behind him? Does he smell danger in the air? Acting out the scene like this can really help you channel the nuances into your characters. Aside from that, I'd also suggest that you do a couple iterations of your illustration where you try out different choices on each of the characters' poses, the angle the camera is viewing the scene at, shape of the tree canopy, etc. You could even play with the shape of the canvas, maybe the scene would look cooler if you pushed it vertically or horizontally
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Elias Lemus
Thank you so very much! I started to try acting out the poses and it really does help. Thank you for all your great feedback
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leximichelle
I LOVE your composition. As Jean-Francois said, the falling character does feel rather stiff and almost robotic. Maybe try a few gestures of falling characters to get a feel for what the limbs would do and what "falls first," if that makes sense. Jean also mentioned that the eye isn't really drawn towards anything else in the image besides the two characters. Personally, I don't find anything wrong with it, but if it concerns you, I might try adding some falling leaves or small animals like birds or squirrels or maybe one of them set some sort of trap for the other in a tree that would be visible in the background, All in all, I think you're off to a great start.
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Elias Lemus
Thank you! You both make a good point about the stiffness in the falling pose. I'll address that and the other comments as well!
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Jean-Francois (Jeff) Durix
Nice sketch and I like very much the bottom to top view. I have two comments 1. the composition is too much around the vertical central axis of the image. The eye comes in from the top centre and goes directly out at the centre bottom. No encouragement to go around the rest of the picture. IIt kind of feels stiff... maybe changing the angle of view to drive the viewers’ eye from top right to bottom left and have a few eye catching details, or playing with sharpness would help guide the viewer around your picture 2. Linked to the previous one, the diving character’s gesture is very stiff, symmetric. It feels as if he would be in a free fall more than in a diving position from the surrounding trees. I would try to bring dynamism to his gesture, break the symmetry
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Elias Lemus
Thank you very much! Both great points to be considered.
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Elias Lemus
Not sure where to post this.. but im just looking for any feedback on my IN PROGRESS digital piece. The idea is a dude with war paint diving onto an enemy. Just wanna here some feedack to improve it and make it the best it can be. Color ideas, alterations, additions, etc.. It's not a "finished" drawing so there is refining to do but technical feedback is welcome too. Thanks in advance!
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Elias Lemus
Nice work. What I would suggest is to practice some perspective and simple form drawing. Anatomy is great, but your line work seems a little hesitant and the perspective of the face at the bottom left isn't quite there. The eyes, nose and chin area should be parallel. Focus a little more on those two things, simple forms and perspective, and you'll see a big leap in improvement. I know because I was in the same spot! Good luck
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Elias Lemus
Nice work! For improvement, work on your transitions from light to shadow. They seem a little abrupt. Also, of you want to emulate Bauman, look at his edge work. He doesn't use many outlines, though when he does, they're vary intentional. Keep it up!
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Elias Lemus
Nice work! My suggestions are as follows.. both the time management and not knowing what to focus on can be alleviated at least a bit by starting each piece with an intention. What is your goal? Are you practicing anything in specific? Value? Color? The effects of light? Proportion? This will help you put an emphasis on one or maybe a couple things and as far as what to focus on, is there a weakness you'd like to strengthen? Or maybe there's a certain thing about the model or scene that moved you more than anything else. Hope that helps.
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Jan D.
Hi Elias! I like the colours you used there:) Maybe you could consider a lower camera angle for this piece? also You could totally use some reflected moonlight to light the face up a little and get some nice expression in there!:) Nice mood!
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Elias Lemus
I agree with the camera angle, most definitely. Thank you for your feedback. I will definitely put it to use. Thanks!
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Steve Lenze
Hey Elias, I like the mood of this piece, and I like the warm against cool colors you have. The main thing with this is the perspective, you must make sure it's applied to the whole drawing. I did a draw over to show you what I mean. But... I also drew another version with more dramatic 3 point perspective and an up shot to show more interest. I thought it would help you think about other perspective views while developing your ideas. I hope this helps :)
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Elias Lemus
Thank you so much! That is some great feedback and some great sketches! I will definitely keep all of that in mind. Thank you.
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Elias Lemus
Hi! This is a digital painting I finished recently and would love a critique on it! Technical, compositional, opinion... any form of critique is welcome. All I want is to get better. Thank you.
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Elias Lemus
Great Great work! As far as critique, I'd think about brushwork and just trying to make the texture of different materials portray what they are, if that makes sense. Doing awesome!
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Elias Lemus
This is a great start! As far as things that need a second look, in my opinion, would be 1) the scale of the figures. The girl seems too small. 2) the way the hands lay on his head seem a little unnatural. Take a picture with your hands on someone's head and compare the two 3) the facial features seem a little out of scale. The eyes seem a little big. Good luck and I hope that helps! You're on your way.
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Elias Lemus
First of all.. DO NOT STOP DRAWING. I had issues and I was able to reverse them. Still working on it, but I have progressed. I had signs of arthritis and early carpal tunnel. My hand would swell and I'd get pain that shot from my shoulder blade down to my wrist. My hand would get numb as well. Then I had lower back pain. It was all connected. Here's the deal, I had/kinda have horrible posture and muscle imbalances from being overweight and sedentary. What helped me was 1. Physical therapy for posture and repetitive motion 2. Working out, to strengthen my body 3. Yoga 4. Deep tissue massages 5. Acupressure massages. Point is, the whole body is connected and I'd start off by excercise, stretching, yoga, and seeing a physical therapist. That's at least what has helped me and I went from being stiff in the morning to almost doing the splits. You can do it! And I never quit drawing. And as far as critique, you're doing great! What I would advise you improve is your structural drawing. Good luck. Also, I am not a doctor.
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Elias Lemus
Your drafstmanship is great. I do see you included one of the model pictures, but I don't seem to find a drawing that matches it. I believe structure and gesture can be somewhat opposite of each other. You can definitely study both simultaneously, but it is also important to study them separate. If you could post the model pics with the corresponding drawing side by side I could give more detailed feedback.
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Elias Lemus
Hey Stan! Thank you for everything you do! My question is: what percentage of time did you (as a student) spend on studies/sketching as opposed to "finished pieces". What did that ratio look like, and how has that changed as your skills have improved?
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Elias Lemus
Hey Stan! Thank you for everything you do! My question is: what percentage of time did you (as a student) spend on studies/sketching as opposed to "finished pieces". What did that ratio look like, and how has that changed as your skills have improved?
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Elias Lemus
Thank you for everything you have given to the art world. I am deeply grateful. I have a couple questions if I may. I watched the podcast episode on developing an illustration and was wondering what could be a "reasonable" time frame for finishing an illustration starting from the preliminary work? I fear I take too long on pieces. And what is a good excercise to learn to better see colors as values to get the values correct?
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