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Peter Anton
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I like the concept, and your bears really feel like bears. I will give you my opinions:
1) the connection of the big bear's arms to the body feels weird. I'd make sure you're drawing through the form and thinking about where the ribcage is, making sure the shoulder joints are in the right place. I'd also do some ear studies on how the ears connect to the skull. The shapes of them look great, but they look like flat pieces of paper, as if the back of the ear is missing. In reality, ears are gonna have more of a bowl shape to catch the sound, like a cupped hand.
2) just a personal take on the acting. If I had my arm transformed into a crab arm, I wouldn't be looking at the crab with a bear arm, I'd be looking at my own arm and freaking out. Try getting into the pose and film yourself, and use freeze frames from the video. Really pretend you're that bear and FREAK OUT!!!
3) The little bear's hat is very symmetrical. I think you could push the pinch in the back and stretch in the front, and perhaps attach it to the shape of the head by giving it more of a brim (maybe just grab some reference. His staff also seems a little under designed. Is it an old wooden staff or a sleek metal staff? It feels more like a line than a 3d form. His legs are also very parallel. I'd taper them or curve the front side to make it a more dynamic shape. Finally, his feet are 100% horizontal and parallel to the picture plane, which tends to flatten out the pose
4) You could really push the idea with constrast. What if the limbs retained their original size? A little crab with a giant paw that is way too big for it. Maybe he LOVES this giant paw and holds it up proudly, admiringly, thinking of how it will make him popular with the lady crabs. But the bear looks in horror at the stumpy little crab claw sticking out of his shoulder.
Elias Lemus
1yr
Thank you so much! You're critique is phenomenal! I have a lot to think about! I'll be going over this feedback multiple times to really make my work better. Thank you!
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1yr
This is really cool did the bear catch some sort of disease from the crab lol?
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Lol not exactly! The idea is that the little wizard bear accidentally switched their arms. I think I could make that more clear though!
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Looking for feedback on my concept1yr
Hi everyone! I was hoping to get some feedback on the concept and I guess anything else on this little sketch. It wasn't intended to be a polished, finished piece so i know the shading and some linework is rough. I was focusing more on the idea and legibility of it on this. Thanks!
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Ah, yes! These are great! It's so crazy how much movement comes across!!
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Hey Elias,
The one thing I noticed is that the two boys are not intergraded into the scene because you are having the light abruptly stop, and they are not being effected by it. The same goes for the trees and bushes in the foreground.
By adding some rim light, it would help make everything look like it's in the same scene and will separate the boys from the background a little better. I did a very crude sketch to show you what I mean, I hope this helps :)
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Steve! I was honestly waiting for you! Lol you always come through with a great critique! Thank you so much! Yea, you're definitely right about the light.. I'll fix that and improve on my next piece! Thanks!
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I would appreciate some critique on a new piece1yr
Just recently finished. I'd appreciate some feedback 🙂 I'm trying to be more narrative with my work. I'd like to be an illustrator for books and board games! Thanks in advance
You nailed it. Period. Whatever you did, do it again. Post it and see if you nail it again.
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I Need Help With My Work in Progress1yr
I'm struggling with my current piece.. specifically all the arms and hands! But if anything else seems off, please tell me too! I just need some opinions on the current progress! Thank you!
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Where does my art fit?1yr
I really need some help focusing where I'd like to work. I want to be a freelance illustrator but I don't know where my art fits! I'd like to someday do a lot of things, but I need to pick a lane at least to start. I'm just not sure where my art fits? If anywhere! Or if it'd even good enough.. I started with a lot of portraiture but I've been wanting to do more narrative/illustrative work. Attached are various pieces that you could say are my "rough portfolio"? Any feedback will help! Thanks! FYI, the one with the bear is unfinished!