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Davi Lo
My newest illustration! Really tough one, spent more time on it than I'm willing to admit Was very inspired by Edward John Poynter's 'Feeding the Sacred Ibis in the Halls of Karnak' Would love to hear your opinions! C&C Welcome!! ༼ つ ◕_◕ ༽つ
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Liandro
@Davi Lo How cool! This is solid work, your time certainly paid off. I think @Rebecca Shay makes a pretty good point considering the lighting, so I'd like to add up to that! I'm not biologically qualified to discuss color temperature though (I'm partially colorblind 🙈), but I can talk about the overall lighting scheme and the value relationships. Basically, what I find is that a bit more contrast on the character might help bring up the scene! So I made a grayscale paint-over on top of Rebecca's edition of your original work, and here's what I added: . I made the bounce light areas a bit more bright, especially on her torso and clothes (when I squint at the painting, I feel like this extra contrast on the bounce lights makes it more clear to read the beautiful twist of her pose); . Added a rim light on the right side of the character to make sense with the big sunlight coming from behind (and it also makes her figure pop some more); . Lightened up the background a little more, especially on the surroundings of the character so that the darker values on her could gain more power; . And I added a few tweaks to try to make the scene feel more natural: a bit more sub-surface scattering on the drapes on her shoulder; a little light bleed on the strong highlight of the sword; and a bit more blur on the background for a stronger sense of atmosphere. Hope this gets the point across! Since I'm not a painter or lighting specialist, there might be more stuff to work on... but I tried my best, and these are the things I could find right now. Hope this helps!! Let me know if you have any questions or thoughts. Best of luck! And keep up the amazing work! o/
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Davi Lo
Wow thank you for all these observations and taking time to paint them out!! I feel that maybe some of the considerations might feel a bit unnatural, like adding a rim light puzzles me a little bit since she's in shadow, but overall I think I get the point! Thank you again for the help, really appreciate it, will take those into consideration!!
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Rebecca Shay
Wow I love her pose and the fabric! There's something about the color temperature of the lights that bugs me. I tried making the sky less blue and it looks better. If I only look at her, I feel like she's indoor at night with a firelight as a source. But behind her it shows strong broad daylight but she's standing in the shadow so it makes things a little complicated. What complicates things is I'd expect a lot of bounced light considering the marble texture of the building. That's a lot of text to say, something is off with the color temperature and I have no idea how to fix it. I would love to see if you found a solution though.
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Davi Lo
Very interesting points! Thank you for taking the time to do a paint over and pointing these things out, I'll take those into consideration!!
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Rebecca Shay
This is one of Poynters' works. That light setting looks much more logical.
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Jan D.
Love it! The storytelling and execution:) If I had to nitpick, maybe the far side of her face is sticking a little bit too much outwards, making the face a little flat? Also not a critique but a recommendation really: maybe try out a slight noise filter over the top? I often find it makes digital paintings feel more polished/unified. Can also help with some colour banding that you might get on some darker pieces. Something very subtle though. Matter of taste really:) Great job!:)
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Davi Lo
Ohh that's a great observation, I'll take those into account in the future! Thank you! :)
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