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Atharva Lotake
I just did a master study. What do you guys think of the persons right eye, does it look wierd? I intended to decrease the contrast and detail in the shadows but it doesn't seem to work. Constructive criticism appreciated. Thanks
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Olga Bruser
Hi, looks awesome! It feels a bit too soft on the left - where the cheek and and hair meet especially that you have a sharper edge right on top of the that.
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Sketcher Ameya
I do not find any problem in it . It is looking really good
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much
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Luigi Manese
Hi @Atharva Lotake, I think two very slight adjustments you can make is to 1: line up the structure of the right eye to match the perspective of the other features. The eyeline seems a bit off in comparison to the perspective of the nose and mouth. 2: you can add subtle value information just to indicate a bit more form around the eye. I just added a bit of indication of the eyelash, some occlusion shadow above the eye, and a bit more form on the bottom of the eyelid. Overall though this is a fantastic piece. Keep it up, and I hope this helps!
Atharva Lotake
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much I really appreciate your feedback.
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Mengu Gungor
Nice work, I really like the structural aspects. The eye is I think a tiny amount lighter value than it should be. One of the things to note as you mentioned in Jacob Collins's work is that he compresses the value range in the shadow side. So detecting value differences can be a bit more challenging in a study. Also I'm not sure if this was an intentional change, but maybe the saturation of the reds is overpowering the image a bit. I think his background was more neutral, and he used more of a mix of saturated and desaturated colors in the skin and hair. Different background color can really throw off your perception of all the other hues in the image. There are some proportional differences, but those don't really have to be a focus. I think overall you did a great job with the values and shapes. Random fact, Jacob Collins is my instructor's instructor... Also, now I want to do a study of one of his portraits.
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much I really appreciate your feedback, also what a coincidence, it must be really cool to study from a masters student!
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Yiming Wu
Hi Atharva! This is already looking gorgeous... You have original? Looks to me the white part of that eye gets muddled with the face, maybe you still need a little bit of crease there. That part is not typically treated as a lost edge. And in my experience, the corners of the eye are got to be very dark, even you want to have soft/lost edges there you still need to push it real dark for the "sphere part of the eye" to really show dimension, just like the other eye you did. Overall Awesome job!
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Atharva Lotake
This is the original, Thank you so much I really appreciate your feedback.
Jacob Collins   May 2  30, John Pence Gallery, San Francisco
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James Doane
Nice work! I think his right side of the face seems flat, so that eye just seems to be floating on the surface rather than pushed into the skull. I would think some darker shadow above the eye may help resolve that... not sure.
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much I really appreciate your feedback.
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