Is this a Pleasing Composition?
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Atharva Lotake
Hey Guys! I just completed SVS learn's Creative Composition 2.0. The final assignment was to compose a scene based on this description " Quickly the little salamander scampered down to the forest floor and hid from the squirrel!" I also had to include as many elements as possible so it may feel a little chaotic but I wanted to create a pleasing composition. What do you guys think about it and what could I have done better. Please help me with it. Thank you!
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Zoungy Kligge
To answer your question, yes it is a pleasing composition! As for help and suggestions I offer this draw-over. I've turned the salamander the other way to imply escape, left to right, and reshaped the body to follow the action line started by the falling leaves. I've also tipped the entire composition to turn all verticals into diagonals. Adjusted grasses to be more menacing. Simplified some value relationships and cleared out space to increase contrast in the main squirrel/moon area and the lizard's face/eye area, to emphasize the relationship between them. Does that help? PS my album where I have these pictures filed is a hidden album. If you can not see the images please tell me.
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well i like it . i maybe would have done it from a different angle . maybe more of a jungle theme and i maybe would have done the salamander more to the ground. but hey thats just the way that i would have done it. and i personally think that you did a great job presenting this image. based on what rules you had to abide by and i can see that you definitely gave you're surroundings a lot of for thought. so with that said yes there are areas that . could" use work but with time you will totally get this type of thing down i swear upon it just give you're work passion care love worth like you mean it . and you will be great. god bless & stay creative ✌😉
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the kind words
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Josh Sunga
Hey @Atharva Lotake ! I like your scene- especially the tree of squirrels. I did a paintover to play around with some ideas for your scene. First I wanted the tree to stand out more and feel more imposing. I removed the moon and evened out the lighting across the sky so that the entire canopy of squirrels could be silhouetted rather than the single squirrel eclipsing the moon. Increasing the contrast around the tree also let me focus on its overall shape. I added a little twist to it to make it feel more antagonistic. Making the squirrels smaller also improves the scale and depth of the image- it makes the tree feel bigger and makes the lizard look like it has ran a distance from it. I wanted to also have the tree cast its shadow over the lizard to push the tension of the story- with more time I would try to clarify the shape of the shadow. It would be a nice transition from midground to foreground. I added under-lighting to the lizard- increasing the render level on the it would anchor it as a focal point. I shortened the foliage in the foreground, allowing me to establish the midground. Removing the left side tree also opened up the sky and clarified the silhouettes of the leaves in the breeze- which helps with the movement in the scene. I cleared out the tertiary subject matter in the original so I could focus on the main story of the scene. (But there's nothing wrong with the extras since building up the chaos was your intention- you can always add them back in later.) Overall, love the drama and playfulness of your scene, hope some of this helps!
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Atharva Lotake
I really appreciate that you took the time to do s full on paintover
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the feedback
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Peter Anton
The thing that stand out to me is that the trees are really boxy, almost parallel to the canvas. There's also no overlap from the salamander to the tree behind it, and same with the first tree to the second tree. I'd also look into how you can improve the foreground- shoving some plants into the corner is kind of a default solution that's not really interesting (I'm trying to break that habit too!). I'd do some master studies and see what they do
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the feedback
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Sketcher Ameya
Looking nice . Keep it up atharva
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much
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Sonja Müller
I honestly love your solution and I would like to see it as full worked out illustration! Maybe I would add some iris values to the gecko's eye. So we can see that he is maybe looking back at the tree and also because that makesmit easier to empathize with him. Completely black eyes have the opposite effect. And another thought - but I am really in doubt if it would work better - my eyes start at the squirrel before the moon, explore the others a bit and then go to the gecko. But the the lead is lost a bit, because the snake is too subtle to me to pick it of and lead back to the tree. You could think about change it, but I think the theme would change then to danger is everywhere. Or gecko and moon could be lined up a bit different so that I follow the geckos direction up and then find the moon again. But as I said that is just a thought and it might destroy more than help. Really great work, I would have never come up with this composition with the gecko big in he forground.
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Atharva Lotake
Thank you so much for the feedback.
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jdn
3mo
i full heartedly agree with this statement. bless you @Sonja Müller 😁✌
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