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A Traveling Musician
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Jo Edgehill
Hi! I was hoping to get a critique on my newest drawing. I am sixteen and aiming to work in the entertainment industry, so any pointers are highly appreciated..thank you! :)
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Dan B
Nice work Jo! As the others mentioned I would also bring out a bit more vibrancy in the girl, but the other thing that stood out to me is the contrast and saturation on the wagon is really bold and warm, which brings it into the foreground. So I would actually decrease saturation a bit on the wagon to push it back and perhaps move the colours a bit cooler (particularly the shadow side, make that 'bluer') to help with that. Other minor nitpick is the way she's holding the flute she's playing it with her nose ;) I'd either move it away from her face a bit or if she's playing it, move it down a little and rotate the holes towards her mouth (at least the hole at her mouth). Here's a draw-over. I'm not great with colour yet but hopefully this gives you an idea of what I mean with the wagon. Keep up the good work!
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Jo Edgehill
First of all,I'm still laughing at your observation of where I placed the flute! Second ,I see where the cooler colors could be better for the background ,so I'll try to remember that when I redraw this. Thank you very much for the critique! :) It's highly appreciated!!
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Luigi Manese
Hi @Jo Edgehill, first of all, great work! I think if you're starting to get serious this early, then you're well on your way to reaching your goal of working in the entertainment industry. So, I do think that the perspective issues in the drawing are what pop out first, but since Steve Lenze already broke that down, I think I'd like to point out something else for you to consider. So, based on the design/subject matter you have here, I'm assuming you would want to work on an animated production? If that's the case, then paying attention to color is going to be really important. It looks like you're adding shadow to your colors by making the local color darker. When you choose a shadow by moving straight down on the color wheel, you're actually making the shadow less saturated. This ends up killing the vibrancy of your color overall. When choosing shadow colors, try making them slightly more saturated (by moving it to the right of the color wheel) and even changing the color temperature. There's a lot of things we can cover as you start to progress, but this seems like a good concept to add to your plate. Great work! Let me know if there is anything that I can clear up for you
Jo Edgehill
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Jo Edgehill
Wow,first of all,thank you for taking the time to look at my work! It's an honor to be critiqued by such amazing artists! I honestly don't even know where to start in terms of questions. I guess that I'd first like to ask you about the color. When adding shadow colors , you're saying to make them more vibrant? I apologize for my confusion ,but I'm just recently getting into color studies. May I ask what you mean by changing the color temperature? Again,thank you for helping me out!
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Steve Lenze
Hey Jo, Nice drawing, especially for a sixteen year old, wow. I have some things I hope will help you in the future with your drawings. I work in the entertainment industry, and the one thing you have to know is perspective!! How you place elements in a picture in perspective and relating to each other. I did a draw over so that you can understand what I mean, I hope you find it helpful :)
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Jo Edgehill
Wow,thank you so much for the draw over, Sir! It opened my eyes to a lot of mistakes I made.Now that I see them ,I will try to fix them and keep your advice in mind for my next drawings. Thank you again! :)
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Jacky w
I love the flow and gesture of the character, the choice of where you placed the cat and how the cat is leaning in the same direction also makes it pretty easy to read rather than have it everywhere. I think you can hold off on the complex shading (keep it simple) and really work on the anatomy and gesture, the color choices are nice but a little too muted (my personal opinion). I feel like with a whimsical piece like this, you can use brighter more saturated colors to really make it pop, the character has a lot of life due to the gesture, try reworking the color and see how it makes a difference. :) These are just some of my thoughts, I hope you keep it up! You are way better than me when I was your age!
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Jo Edgehill
First of all ,thank you so much for taking the time to critique me!! I definitely see where the colors could be brighter ,so I'll work on that! I'll also work on the gesture , which I thought was a little off afterwards. Thank you again,I appreciate it so much!! :)
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Nicole Lee
Nice drawing! I like how the girl and the cat both have dynamic gestures and details. The carriage is also nicely done too. Although the focus is on the characters and the object, I feel like the background (grass, road and the sky) can be painted with a bit more design to make the whole painting looks complete. Hope that helps!
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you for your critique!! I'll try to add more details to the background with your suggestions in mind. Thank you again!! :)
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Sketcher Ameya
Nice drawing
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you!! :)
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