Jo Edgehill
Jo Edgehill
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Just a little artist with a big dream :)
Crystal Blue  (she/her)
For the rendering, you could probably play around with adding in more hard edges, and balancing soft and hard edges. (Sinix has some good videos that go into that if you’re interested). You do that a little bit though with the purple shading on the arm and ear, which I am a big fan of, love the color choice. Looks great. Also might be interesting to experiment with using some different brushes that aren’t as blurry.
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Jo Edgehill
Wow , thanks for your critique! I'll try to get a better balance of hard and soft edges next time. Thanks again! :)
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Jo Edgehill
Hello! I was hoping to get some feedback on this drawing I worked on a couple days ago. Next time I'm hoping to do something more dynamic,but this one was more about the rendering. Thank you for any help! :)
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Josh Sunga
Hey @Jo Edgehill! Nice work :) But I think the soft shadow rendering conflicts with the stylized design of your character. I did a paintover to design more graphic shadow shapes and also rendered the face more just to show the level of render can vary- it just needs to feel by design. (I'd rather keep it all graphic 2D personally) The reference in the image below are great examples of different render styles that still feel equally cohesive. Thanks for sharing!
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Jo Edgehill
First of all , thank you for taking the time to critique my work! I appreciate you putting this reference board together.I hope you don't mind me asking one question: If I want to pursue a career in 2D animation or character design(I still can't decide),should I go for a more simple ,flat type of shading in my artwork? Thank you again for your time! :)
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Hank Macleod
I love how much personality this character has! I would think about the balance of the figure for the next draft. It looks like the character is leaning too far to the right to stay upright. Maybe try more of a bend at the waist to bring the torso over the base of support, or pop the right (anatomical left) leg out to widen the base of support in order to accomodate that lean. Great style, and I hope I get to see the finished piece!
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Jo Edgehill
First of all, thank you! I can definitely see where it is unbalanced ,and will try to fix that now. I look forward to your opinion on the finished piece! :) Thank you again!
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pollypopcorn
You've got a cute design. I think you could think of some of the cast shadows that might be on the figure, like by the left collar. I think that region could use a little more shading in general because it feels kind of flat. Here's a paint-over I attempted. This is my first time trying this, so it may not actually be any better. If you're going for more of a cartoony look it can be good to have all your shadows the same value without gradient, whereas I guess I was trying to make it more three dimensional.
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Jo Edgehill
I'll definitely try to include your critique in the final piece.. thank you so much for your advice!! :)
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Jo Edgehill
Hi! I have a drawing I started yesterday( which is still in the sketch phase),and would appreciate any feedback on how to improve on it. Thank you! :)
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Jonas Gezels
I did a real quick draw over but I feel like your lacking 3d or are struggling with them, everything feels very flat try to think you are going over someones are like if you were to run a pen over your friends arm. doing some basic cylinder studies will help greatly to make you think more in 3d space. just keep on going and never be hard on yourself
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you for the draw over!! It definitely helped me see my mistakes. I'll remember this in my next drawing. Again , thank you so much!! :)
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David Sánchez
Well, the character design looks nice, the rendering of the face works really well with the style you are striving, but it feels disconected with the rest of the body, which has shadows with low contrast and leaves ambiguity to the forms. The line quality also looks less refined than the ones used in the head. That's the main thing that comes to mind, but it certainly turned out better, so good improvement there!
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Jo Edgehill
I can definitely see what you mean. I'll try to clean up some of the lines so that it's more cohesive. Thank you so much for your critique! :)
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Jo Edgehill
Hi! I'm back with a more lazy, practice drawing. I wanted to redraw a sketch from 2019,and I hope it turned out a bit better :) Please give me your opinion on her! Thank you!!
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Jo Edgehill
Hello! I am sixteen ,and aspiring to be a professional artist in the entertainment industry. I have been doing digital art for about a year now ,and would like to find out what things I need to work on in order to get closer to my goal. I included one of my unfinished pieces (fourth), because I would like to show my "process". Any kind of feedback would be highly appreciated , thank you so much for the opportunity!!
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Diana Mata
Hi Jo. Check the twist on the character's chest: it's looking left, while the base of the neck is almost on top of the opposite shoulder and looking right. The base of the neck should line up with the torso, independently of where the head is turning. It seems the character's left shoulder has two things going on: that shoulder, if you follow the arm, ends at the base of where the neck is right now, but at the same time the cape is covering a shoulder that doesn't line up with the arm. Hope this is helpful.
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Jo Edgehill
Ah,I definitely see what you mean. I'll try to fix my mistakes in my next drawing.. thank you! :)
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Steve Lenze
Hey Jo, First of all, the head shot is really nice, and has good expression. The figure has a nice gesture and also a good expression, well done. I did do a draw over to show you a few things you can think about with your designs. One concept that you should learn is the idea of simple vs complex. Try to keep one side of a shape simple and the other side complex, or one side stretched, the other side bunched up or pinched. This is something that will keep your designs from looking too busy for the eye. Also, try not to bury hand gestures inside the silhouette, it makes it hard to read. I hope this helps :)
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Jo Edgehill
I really appreciate it,Mr Lenze. Honestly , your help is so valuable to me as a growing artist. I always try to take your advice and do better ,and I feel as though I have improved a lot. Thank you as always! :)
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leximichelle
HI Jo. I really like your character's expressions. I noticed the proportions are a bit off; one forearm is significantly bigger than the other, and the last three fingers on his left hand are small and bent at a weird angle (they almost look broken). I think it's a nice overall design, but I would also mess around with the colors a bit. The black of the leggings is a very stark contrast to the overall desaturation of the other colors (maybe town the black down to a cark gray or brighten up some of the other grays for something closer to a midtone). Aaron Blaise has a great tutorial on drawing hands on his youtube channel, and you might consider googling different color schemes with the colors you chose to get an idea of what levels of shade and saturation go well together. Overall though, I think it's a great start.
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Jo Edgehill
Wow that's a lot more than I had expected haha. However,I appreciate it so much and will try my best to fix it! Thank you for your advice! :)
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I'm back with another piece I'd like feedback on...I'm slightly embarrassed by this one,but would like to hear any changes I could make anyway. Thank you! :)
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Steve Lenze
Hey Jo, it's me again :) I like the attitude of this pose and facial expression, nice. The pose is a little stiff, you will see in my drawing that you are using straight lines. All I did was tilt the head, torso and left leg a little to add some curve to the pose. Hope it's helpful :)
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Jo Edgehill
Hi again,Mr Lenze! Thank you as always for helping me out with my drawings ,I appreciate it more than you know. Your advice is always so helpful! I'll be looking forward to your insight on my next drawing! :)
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Alessandro Dalponte
Hey @Jo Edgehill , nice drawing, the gesture is really good! One thing I think might help is to define a little bit better the shadows. You could add some contrast to it and also use it to better show the forms of the body and the clothing of your character.
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you for your critique! I'll make sure to remember that when I start over.. thanks again!! :)
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you!! :)
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Jo Edgehill
Hi! I'm just looking for any kind of critique on this old drawing , because I would like to redraw it. Thank you!!
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Luigi Manese
Definitely looking a lot more solid overall! It's awesome to see how many different critiques you've applied to your updated piece.
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you! I appreciate your help especially :)
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Steve Lenze
Yeah, the figure looks so much more balanced, good job!
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Jo Edgehill
Thank you,Sir! I appreciate your help! :)
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