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Anubhav Saini
Hello please can anyone give their feedback on gesture and balance also i feel something is off on the shoulder area but i can't seem to figure out what *are there any perspective problems
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Zach Leighty
Hello, commenting from the prospective of a friend. I think what makes the shoulder on the left look off is the curvature of the arm itself. That elbow should be on the back of the arm from this perspective giving the shoulder a rounded look. Try getting rid of the elbow and putting a crease in the middle of the arm to give it a natural flow.
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Liandro
Hey, @Anubhav Saini, sorry for the late reply! Looks like @Steve Lenze has given you a very helpful feedback already and clarified how you could solve the major drawing issues. As a complement, since you mentioned you wanted the character to look angry, I sketched a quick gesture over Steve’s drawing just to illustrate how I’d push the pose a bit more towards an angry body language. Feel free to tone down the “cartooniness” and adapt the overall idea to whatever style you’re going for. And keep in mind that, besides the body language alone, the character’s facial expression and the narrative context in your story should also help accentuate the idea that he’s angry. Hope this helps! And please let me know in case you have any questions. Best regards!
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Anubhav Saini
Thank you very much for your feedback it is really helpful!!!!!
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Steve Lenze
Hey Anubhav Saini, I took the perspective you have for the room, and set the figure in that perspective. I'm not sure what you have the figure doing, so I just had him walk into the room. The biggest change I made is to show more of the floor, having the figure walk on the bottom of the panel doesn't look right. I hope this helps :)
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Anubhav Saini
Thank you very much for your feedback it is really helpful
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Leandro Alli
Hey Anubhav! I'm not sure I understand what the pose is trying to achieve so I'm haveing difficulties drawing a manequinn to help you out. I belive one thing is causing you trouble is the fact that the left forearm is out of proportion, it's too long. So the character may have to be bending more in order to achieve the pose you want. I would recommend you draw the box of the torso first, try to draw a simplified manequinn on top to better understand his placement on the scene. If you need help achieving that, I recommend Proko's lesson on the Robo Bean: How to Draw Structure in the Body - Robo Bean Hopefully it's helpful, cheers!
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Anubhav Saini
Thank you very much
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Manuel
hello, @Anubhav Saini. I'm new here in the community, this is my first attempt to participate and help a fellow artist.   In order to help you more in detail, it might be good if you give an idea of ​​where you are pointing with the figure, what would be your idea of ​​the most finished drawing, such as if it is walking fast, or angry, or entering a place. etc.  As for the gesture I think it's quite clear, he's walking, something common when walking is that when the right foot is in front, the right arm is behind, I think it's something we do naturally to balance ourselves, I'm not sure. and regarding the shoulder area, what looks a bit strange are the lines that join the shirt with the sleeves (of the shirt), on the left arm the bottom line of the sleeve should be crossing the line that outlines the back, on the right arm the line that outlines the chest should be crossing the bottom line of the sleeve. (with your permission I could better illustrate this last point with a quick sketch on the drawing you shared) Also to help accentuate perspective, you could play around a bit by making the limbs that are positioned furthest from the camera a bit smaller than the ones in front. I hope the observations are useful to you. much encouragement with your drawing. cheers!
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Anubhav Saini
Welcome to the community and thank you for your feedback my idea was to make him look angry and i give you my permission to do a quick sketch on my drawing
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Ross Cline
I think that the shoulder would creates a convex shape, especially given the way you have the elbow pointing up
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