Hi Carl, This is a good concerted effort and you show an understanding of the concept that Stan teaches. Technique is what needs to get addressed. Recall that he added an emphasis on using CSI during the gesture lessons. A lot of your lines are fragmented and scratchy. With that said, you need to focus on producing single strokes using C, S, or I shapes before you start creating gesture sketches and the bean. Remember to relax and inhale/exhale while letting your sketching instrument flow on the paper. You shouldn't be adding a lot of pressure to your pencil when sketching, that just signals tension and can create an excessive amount of friction/roughness. Be smooth and slow, the speed will come with practice. Good luck and happy practicing!