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Anubhav Saini
There were three people inside the cabin surrounded by mountains and lushy green forest and among those lushy green forests lies a dried tree no one knows as to why that particular tree is dried among those lushy green forest and beside that tree lies a wooden cabin and in that cabin lives 3 people and one among them was a very weak hearted and others were very macho not afraid of anything at all and they were getting bored so suddenly one of the brave hearts decides to use a oouja board and the weak hearted ones got shrieked in fear but after being persuaded by other persons he decided to join and so they started the ouja board and after a while they got bored so they closed the game without saying goodbye and threw the game in dustbin as they said that it is a rubbish boring game and so they went to sleep afterwards and when they started to sleep one of them heard a footsteps of someone outside their room so he got up to check but to his suprise there was none else there only him and the darkness and crankiness of the wooden floor and after not seeing him he went back to his bed and the other persons also have the same experience and again after some while they heard the same footsep but this time with a little murming and an eerie voice so all of them got panicked and got out to fuckin see them and one of them tried to switch on the light but suddenly a storm came and it blew the electricity supply away and then there was complete darkness and the murming and the footsteps continued but this time the volume of the footseps grew louder and louder and all of them got scared af and one of the brave hearts peed in his pants wondering who the fuck is that thing and suddenly the footsteps were getting closer to them and with the murming voice it was having a murmuring sound like chahhhhchaavhuuuuuvuuuu voice they were fuckin trembling with fear and then suddenly the weak hearted one rememberd that we didn't finish the game and he rememberd that in the manual it was written that don't leave this game without saying good-bye and so he along with his friends went running to the room where they have played that game earlier that same cranking wooden floor room they went there but could not find the ouja board and the Errie footsteps and murming was approaching fast and hearing all this all three of them got terriefied one was shaking his leg on the floor and one peed in his pants and the weak hearted one stood quiet and tried searching the door and then suddenly he saw that it is inside the dustbin and he took out the ouja board and spread it apart and had set-up the game and as they were doing this the footsteps were coming towards them along the murming sounds and upon fearing the footsteps they went and said good-bye and the game was finished and then voices and murming sounds went way and then they lived happily since then.
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