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Dan B
I like your separation of foreground/background and the composition feels quite good. As Mike said, the foreground intrudes into the scene a bit much, distracting from the characters. I would remove the fence, or change it as it is distracting as is (is it barbed wire, electric?). Although it's a thumbnail, it should be clear what it is or removed if not necessary at this stage. I guess the main thing that jumps at me is 'why?' Why is the salamander running away and why is the squirrel dangerous? Difficult to answer in a drawing but it's not self-evident, so you really need to make the characters very dynamic in appearance and action to demonstrate why it's happening.
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sudip tamang
Now you mention it, I am not liking that fence. It's supposed to just regular fence to separate the forest. And, I will work on their apperance too. I appreciate your feedback. thankyou so much.
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Christopher Beaven
I like the depth you've created with the foreground, mid and background. But the focus of this whole composition is not the squirrel or the salamander. I agree with what Mike Karcz said about the position and posture of the animals as well. Great concept, great depth, just adjust your composition to suit the concept more. Remove anything that doesn't server the purpose of the chase.
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sudip tamang
I am learninig this composition course where the assignment is to include 25items in the scene. I think I got caught up on that, forgetting the main composition. Thankyou for feedback. I love it.
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Mike Karcz
I think the salamander is static in its pose. I like the squirrel's pose, but it doesn't convey that the squirrel is chasing the salamander. I think the poses need to be reworked to show them in the action of the case - the salamander should RUSHING forward and the squirrel should be LAUNCHING after it. There's a sign that says "beware of squirrel". I'd like to see the squirrel take on a menacing pose and the salamander tripping over itself desperate to get away. I like the foliage in the foreground, but the leaves in the center take up a third of the frame and distracts from the the two main subjects, the salamander and the squirrel. Otherwise, I like the composition a lot. I hope this is helpful!
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sudip tamang
It's very helpful.  You are right their pose doesn't serve the story and the leaves on centre is distracting. I will work on it. Thankyou!
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The composition is meant to be a salamander running from squirrel..Any..critiques??
sudip tamang
What kind of and how much assignments do you get in art school? And what to draw when not doing assignments? What a beginner artist daily routine would be who go to art school?
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sudip tamang
U just have to put a lot of practicing hours into this...try to copy from other artists and practice on your self later...by the way these are also good...keep up the good work
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Izak van Langevelde
I incorporated your comments to the best of my abilities. What do you think?
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sudip tamang
I think the shadings are nice...but exaggerate these highlights to make the painting more interesting...keep it up..
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sudip tamang
Throw some highlights....Keepitup!!
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sudip tamang
All great...but I think light and shadow have high contrast
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