Malakai King
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4mo
Here's my attempt at using line weight for depth.
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Just following every step.
4mo
Here is my attempt after watching the video. I improved some, and still need more practice.
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Here is my attempt before watching Stan's explanation video.
Well, I committed myself to post the good, bad, and ugly. I could not strike a good line to save my life. My arm just wouldn't respond. But that's okay.
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7mo
Man, I'm slow. I'm just getting started on this one. Day 1
7mo
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Gave it a shot. Really struggle with line control, so I'm excited to practice more. Some of the sloppiness is because I started to add more detail lines but then decided against it, but I drew the lines too dark to erase fully :(
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7mo
Hey Ben, there's a lot to be proud of here. You nailed the proportions, direction, and placement of the antennas. The proportions and placement of the snail's body is good also. The only issue I see is the snail's left wing is slightly high. Just a suggestion, maybe adding the bevel lines of the shelf may have given you more reference points for placement. But maybe not people's brains work differently. The lines of the shelf got a little out of alignment. The shell proportions are slightly small. I think a lot of us are struggling with line quality. That's why we are here. Great job, keep it up.
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Here are my level 1 boots. Challenging exercise. Have only had time for this one so far. Planning to do the other 3 soon. Also dropped the ball on the draw everyday challenge 😣. Gotta catch up
7mo
Daniel, I like your lines. Good representation on the laces. The foreshortening on the boot from the viewer's left is good, better than my first attempt. The proportions of the toe box are slightly small. The boot on the viewer's right needs to turn more to the right, slightly. Or maybe the toe box is a little short. But this is nit-picky stuff. I had to really look for stuff to critique. Good work! P.S. I'm behind on the challenge too.
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I went for more simplification on the second one. I am happy that I improved the foreshortening and proportions. Man, I lay down lightweight lines. The ones I like I go over to darken them and usually laydown a worse one. I then started to add different line weight and it went sideways really quick. I just abandoned ship. and posted.
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Simplefying isn’t simple !
7mo
Hey Igor, great job. The only two things I see is your proportions for the stomach got a little distended, and maybe the construction of the face is a little flat. Other than then the proportions look good. The construction of the legs, neck and back are solid. Good work!
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Tried this once, but I felt like I got way to caught up in the details, so I did it two more time, trying to simplify it to CSI lines.
I’m open for any critiques on how to simplify better, or if you notice something else to critique.
7mo
Sorry I don't have a critique for you. I just wanted to say, not only is this solid work, but the amount of work you're putting in is inspiring.
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Here is my level 1. Maybe I simplified a little too much comparing to everyone else... but we shouldn't compare ourselves to others, so I keep it like that.
7mo
Venessa, I like what you did here as well. I think I should have simplified my boots more, but I couldn't stop myself. I want to take another run at it. I want to stay in the same vein as you did. Great gob, good work.
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I don't think I keep to the essence of the assignment. But, it's my best try at this time. I look forward to getting better as the course continues.
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My lines are so shaky. I practice lines every day, and still can't draw a straight line to save my life.
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Before and after. Tried to simplify the details around the lips and create more uniform values. Thanks for the critique Stan!
8mo
Danial, your stuff is really good. It is great to be in this community with others that are more skilled. It inspires me to push myself and put in the work like you have.
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I envisioned this coming out better. Building on my last attempt, I was just thinking about shape, tone, and plane. I didn't want to spend 3hrs shading all that dark tone with a pencil again, so I tried markers. They bled over a little and it was hard to control the streaking. It was my first-time using markers, so I won't beat myself up too much. Although my proportions are better, I blew the hair out too much on the subjects top right side. And that nose is still angled too much. Any and all critiques are most welcome. Thanks
Stan's critiques took me further down a road I had started down, but I had stopped short on. I stripped most details away and just thought in terms of shape and tone. Any critiques are most welcome. I think it's one of the most important parts of these courses. Thanks for your time and attention.
8mo
Why do I see these things after I post? My proportions way out of alignment. The nose is angled too much. The subject's left cheek is too wide. And the subject's jaw is angled too far down. Well, like I said, I was so focused on tone and plane.
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Oh my gosh, I'm so sorry to the model for butchering him. The portrait was far more challenging than those little pears. I have to say, I had a lot more fun with it, even if I don't fully feel it was very successful. But, as I just told a friend, I'm going to push through my failures until it starts to come together. You can learn more from failure than from success. It was very challenging to keep everything angular and blocky. I had fun! I look forward to trying this again after watching the demo.
8mo
Casseil, I don't think you need to apologize. You're putting in the work, That's great. I think there's a lot to be proud of here. Your shading is solid. You are keeping true to the assignment. You're grasping the tone grouping. Key into what Stan is say about the lay in process. Find reference points and landmarks, then line things up. For instance, where does the outside of the lip line up with the eye, vertically, which you did a good job on. Notice the distance from the brow line to the hear line, which you need to work on just a little. I constantly reference things like the sheet I included, as I'm in the lay in process. I suggest that you Keep replicating Stans 5 value scale over and over until you've got it down pat. Then visually go back and forth between the scale and your assignment, as you are blocking in your tones. Any and all issues you have will dissolve over time, if keep putting in the work. I like your attitude.
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