sudip tamang
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If superman was asian😅😅😅
I like your separation of foreground/background and the composition feels quite good. As Mike said, the foreground intrudes into the scene a bit much, distracting from the characters. I would remove the fence, or change it as it is distracting as is (is it barbed wire, electric?). Although it's a thumbnail, it should be clear what it is or removed if not necessary at this stage.
I guess the main thing that jumps at me is 'why?' Why is the salamander running away and why is the squirrel dangerous? Difficult to answer in a drawing but it's not self-evident, so you really need to make the characters very dynamic in appearance and action to demonstrate why it's happening.
sudip tamang
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Now you mention it, I am not liking that fence. It's supposed to just regular fence to separate the forest. And, I will work on their apperance too.
I appreciate your feedback. thankyou so much.
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I like the depth you've created with the foreground, mid and background. But the focus of this whole composition is not the squirrel or the salamander. I agree with what Mike Karcz said about the position and posture of the animals as well.
Great concept, great depth, just adjust your composition to suit the concept more. Remove anything that doesn't server the purpose of the chase.
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I am learninig this composition course where the assignment is to include 25items in the scene. I think I got caught up on that, forgetting the main composition.
Thankyou for feedback.
I love it.
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I think the salamander is static in its pose. I like the squirrel's pose, but it doesn't convey that the squirrel is chasing the salamander. I think the poses need to be reworked to show them in the action of the case - the salamander should RUSHING forward and the squirrel should be LAUNCHING after it. There's a sign that says "beware of squirrel". I'd like to see the squirrel take on a menacing pose and the salamander tripping over itself desperate to get away.
I like the foliage in the foreground, but the leaves in the center take up a third of the frame and distracts from the the two main subjects, the salamander and the squirrel. Otherwise, I like the composition a lot.
I hope this is helpful!
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It's very helpful.
You are right their pose doesn't serve the story and the leaves on centre is distracting.
I will work on it.
Thankyou!
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The composition is meant to be a salamander running from squirrel..Any..critiques??
What kind of and how much assignments do you get in art school? And what to draw when not doing assignments? What a beginner artist daily routine would be who go to art school?
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U just have to put a lot of practicing hours into this...try to copy from other artists and practice on your self later...by the way these are also good...keep up the good work
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Asked for help
I incorporated your comments to the best of my abilities.
What do you think?
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I think the shadings are nice...but exaggerate these highlights to make the painting more interesting...keep it up..
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All great...but I think light and shadow have high contrast
Practice gestures...follow proko gestures playlist...
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My guess would be that you draw legs a bit too long sometimes. Two months ago I always made them too short, at the beginning its kinda hard to get proportions right. Otherwise great work.
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Hey Sudip! Great job on these, what I'd say is keep up the good work. The more you keep doing this, the better you'll get.
A couple things I would say is simplify your lines. Right now your drawings look very bumpy which take a way from the overall form and energy of the pose.
I did some rough draw overs to show you what I mean.
For example, in the top drawing. Instead of all over the line on the back describing the anatomy, you can use a singular C curve to describe the entire back.
Hope this helps!
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I keep on forgetting to simply my lines..
This is great advice
I really appreciate it...Thank you so much
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I think they look great and agree with everyone else's post of shortening your time down and just focus on certain aspects of the drawing rather than completion. We are all here to practice and get better after all. Just keep building off the knowledge you're gaining. They look great!
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I wish this is what I looked like after three weeks! These already show understandings of important concepts, gesture mainly. I think what you think is wrong right now is that they look a little flat. This is "easily" augmented with practicing drawing basic forms and then practicing drawing the mannequin. Don't worry about shading during these, as that's something that can be done later.
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Firstly well done! It doesn't look like just 3 weeks since you started! Some of the proportions look slightly off (particularly on the 2-4 images - lengths of the thighs for example). Maybe put off adding in the details to make it look like a body, and make general shapes for the torso/pelvis/legs etc and see if it looks right first. Particularly in the seated poses maybe try to identify an area of 'seat' so your image doesn't look like it is floating. Keep it up!
There is nothing wrong, taking into account that you are three weeks into this. I suggest you complement your figure drawing with exercises to draw/think in 3D space, starting with simple forms like cubes and cylinders. Start with simple objects like cups, vases and boxes, and work your way into more complex shapes.
great job!! I really felt weight, and volume in the first three drawings!
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These are really well done! I would suggest trying to take photos in better lighting next time in order for your drawings to be seen better. I would check on proportions when you start your figure drawings and practicing drawing gestures can definitely help to prevent your drawings from becoming stiff.
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okay..😀😀
I just joined this community...So lighting didn’t go through my mind...
Thank you for your advice?